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Glass kisses

by ~restlessink

You were doling out glass kisses
Looking for your luster to be
Reflected in someone else,
Looking for a shine that would
Burn alongside you. And
Just as Icarus flew to the sun,
You too will reach to the sky
For answers, for inspiration.
You too will be consumed by
Hapless curiosities and a love
Of things unknown. You too
Will learn the meaning of
Silence
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i love Icarus. No doubt will have more of him in my gallery at some point in time :3



I'm not sure I like this one.

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:iconashewalton:
Biitch, congrats on your features ;DD

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thanks lovee~

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*phoenix-karenee Feb 20, 2010  Professional General Artist
Hmmm... I think the lack of a period at the end builds the emphasis of the word "silence" If there were a period it would be final, but without it the thought drags on into a vanishing point without ever closing. Planned or not, it works.

Your poem caught my attention, since I have thought and written about Icarus recently and that reflection of my own thoughts caught me (poetic justice) though your individual perspective gave me something I hadn't had before. It was the phrase "glass kisses" that drew me into the poem. Seeking reflections of self, reaching for the sun ...

I agree that Narcissus adds a new element that enriches the imagery also.

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I wasn't too sure of it, especially the use of Icarus, but the poem has gotten a surprising amount of positive feedback.

thank you! :hug:

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*phoenix-karenee Feb 22, 2010  Professional General Artist
See my other comment for the link, but I linked to this from my blog. I'm enjoying a wander through your gallery, hon ... although, it may take a few days. I'm actually supposed to be editing the colors in a painting right now. *laugh*

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*jamberry-song Feb 7, 2010  Professional General Artist
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*jamberry-song Jan 31, 2010  Professional General Artist
Ah, one question, though. Why no period at the end? You used proper punctuation everywhere else; it would only make sense to use it there as well.

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thank you <3
i never noticed the Narcissus element until you mentioned it :]


Not sure XD
I never really paid attention to it

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*jamberry-song Jan 31, 2010  Professional General Artist
I like it. :)

Especially these lines:

You were doling out glass kisses
Looking for your luster to be
Reflected in someone else


though they remind me more of Narcissus, the poem actually benefits from that other mythological allusion. Nice. :)

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